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(converted to an mp3 or m4a of course), and upload! Please make sure that in your passage
or in the title of your garageband recording, you indicate who you are and what passage you chose for comment.
Oral Commentary Rubric:Rubric (practice):
Student addresses context
Student addresses authorial purpose
File is uploaded approriately and on time
Passage value = __/20 pts.
**For Midterm: Oral commentary will be graded using the IB rubric, and the conversion chart used last year. If you fail to remember the conversion chart, please see Ms. Henry's eboard and go to the tab "midterm." We will be using the exact same conversion chart to create cohesion between the two courses.



Here is my English Midterm Commentary:

EVALUATION BY ELLIOT LEVY
-Did the speaker address context? Purpose?
Yes, she provided context withinyou talked about the book and passage. Thegeneral outline of the story. You did a nice job talking about background information. One thing I would add would be to talk about what happens immediately after. You did mention the overall purpose was was explicitly stated as Maureen demonstrating her power.of the passage, but I would mention it sooner.
-Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?
Yes, she went chronologically.She used a chronological organization pattern
-What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?
What doCan you think is the main reasonprovide some direct context for this shift inpassage?
Did you see any purpose than a power between Maureen and Bam?
Whyshift?
What do you think Bam felt so intimidated by Maureen's shift?
What instigated this shift for Maureen? Why did it influence her so much? How is that displayed in the passage?make of Maurine’s new masculinity?
-What did the speaker do well?
You're very clearYes you spoke clearly, formally, and your pace is appropriate and easy to understand! You tie it all together well in the end.convincingly.
-What would you suggest for improvement?
Sometimes you quote a line and just re-explain what it means, so just make sure you have intention and purpose in allI might divide the passage up into your three supporting examples of your points. You don't do it too often though, just somethingpurpose. This way you can draw upon all quotes that pertain to look for!a specific argument. This makes you commentary stronger as you are jumping around as much.
-What did they forget to address (lit terms, themes, etc.)
A little dialogue that pertained to the passage, such as Bam saying "Oh my god" at MaureenI would talk about Maurine’s character shift more (towards a more masculine character). I know this wasn’t directly your main purpose, but I think you could have been usedrelate it to bolster your argument. Also, at the end it might have helped a bit to elaborate on the father's neck comment (why her father? etc.). You seemedargument to cover most things well, though!strengthen it.
-What would you score them based on the rubric?
A-5
B-8
C-8B-7
C-7
D-4

C-7
D-4
Nice job Drew! Drew
EVALUATION BY ELLIOT LEVY
-Did the speaker address context? Purpose?
Yes, she provided context within the book and passage. The purpose was was explicitly stated as Maureen demonstrating her power.
-Was there an organizational principle utilized for their commentary?
Yes, she went chronologically.
-What questions would you ask this person for clarification, IF YOU WERE THE ACCESSOR?
What do you think is the main reason for this shift in power between Maureen and Bam?
Why do you think Bam felt so intimidated by Maureen's shift?
What instigated this shift for Maureen? Why did it influence her so much? How is that displayed in the passage?
-What did the speaker do well?
You're very clear and your pace is appropriate and easy to understand! You tie it all together well in the end.
-What would you suggest for improvement?
Sometimes you quote a line and just re-explain what it means, so just make sure you have intention and purpose in all of your points. You don't do it too often though, just something to look for!
-What did they forget to address (lit terms, themes, etc.)
A little dialogue that pertained to the passage, such as Bam saying "Oh my god" at Maureen could have been used to bolster your argument. Also, at the end it might have helped a bit to elaborate on the father's neck comment (why her father? etc.). You seemed to cover most things well, though!
-What would you score them based on the rubric?
A-5
B-8
C-8
D-4

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July's People Commentary--Enjoy!
-Did the speaker address context? Purpose?
I thought it was strong both in context and purpose. The context of the book in general was there, but more on the context of the passage within the book would be good, especially if you linked it to the purpose of the passage.